One Deep Breath--"Moonstruck"
The Midnight Cafeteria
Edible, the moon
is sharp cheese or velvet broth.
Soft hope, crisp wrapper.
To read other haikus or to offer one of your own (this week's topic is "moonstruck"), please visit One Deep Breath.
Edible, the moon
is sharp cheese or velvet broth.
Soft hope, crisp wrapper.
To read other haikus or to offer one of your own (this week's topic is "moonstruck"), please visit One Deep Breath.
posted by Cate at 6:39 AM
16 Comments:
"soft hope"...love that. It read like a wisper.
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Very creative and lovely haiku :)
Yummy imagery. I've always thought that the crescent moon looked like someone took a bite out of it.
Love it.. especially the velvet broth description. Excellent!!
I'd like some soft hope, may I have a bite?
Wow,that's really sensuous and lovely.
cracking cheese indeed, a cracking poem! it's a wonderful thing to consider taking a bite out the moon on the occasions it looks like a yellow round cheese - i'm wondering who was the first person to notice the similarity. velvet broth is a new one on me, i do see it now.
could you be the first?! ;o)
great haiku, cate.
I'm liking the "velvet broth." I see you're still writing stellar stuff. Just stopping by to say hi and to see what's up. Hope your summer is going well.
Tanya
* sigh * I love coming here!
I ditto megg.
This haiku - like a lot of your writing makes me feel as if I'm going to fall out of my chair because it's so amazing and thrilling! Thanks!!!!
Hi Cate! I always enjoy your unique take on the prompts. Thanks for participating in ODB!
Love the last line. Thanks for the link. Nice place too.
Hi Ally. I revisit this particular haiku because I like it so much. Then I realized I had not commented! Well, duh. Love this flavorful little piece. My cheese of choice - Brie. My soup? Thick onion soup.
Beautiful! Just beautiful!
that's it! we MUST meet for lunch one day this summer so i can give you a big hug for writing this beautiful beautiful poem and you talked about "It was really good. It was super cool. I liked it because...it made me feel happy" in the other post...well that's just how this one makes me feel :-)
(personally, i'll take inarticulate unbridled enthusiasm anyday over fancy words without warmth...hope you like them too :-)
I just love this...the "soft hope" and the "crisp wrapper" - perfect images!
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