One Deep Breath--Skyscraper: A Haiku
No nature walk for me so far this week, though one would have probably done me good. I left the house briefly last night, to tutor. It about killed me. When I came home, Lou and I had a drink at the patio table; I spritzed Off on him ("That's enough," he said) and watched the citronella candle flicker.
It's hard for me to disrupt my routine; it takes me days to find a rhythm again. I've been obsessed with writing a haiku for Susan and Jennifer's new blog, One Deep Breath. It was much harder than I thought. The assignment this week was the aforementioned nature walk, then haiku and/or photographs. Being housebound (self-imposed, I realize), I drew inspiration from my weekend trip to Manhattan. I know that haikus are supposed to involve nature, but to me, skyscrapers within a city are natural, and so often, beautifully detailed, sleek and shiny, magnificent.
Skyscraper: A Haiku
Our concrete mountains
scaled by pressing a button.
Crowded peak, then sky.
To read other haikus or to submit one of your own, visit One Deep Breath. It is a lovely site, both elegant and refreshing!
It's hard for me to disrupt my routine; it takes me days to find a rhythm again. I've been obsessed with writing a haiku for Susan and Jennifer's new blog, One Deep Breath. It was much harder than I thought. The assignment this week was the aforementioned nature walk, then haiku and/or photographs. Being housebound (self-imposed, I realize), I drew inspiration from my weekend trip to Manhattan. I know that haikus are supposed to involve nature, but to me, skyscrapers within a city are natural, and so often, beautifully detailed, sleek and shiny, magnificent.
Skyscraper: A Haiku
Our concrete mountains
scaled by pressing a button.
Crowded peak, then sky.
To read other haikus or to submit one of your own, visit One Deep Breath. It is a lovely site, both elegant and refreshing!
posted by Cate at 8:31 AM
16 Comments:
Great image. I'll look at tall buildings differently now.
i'm no haiku expert, but it seems to me you've got the right touch here, Cate, launching from the crowded particular moment to a resonating expansive moment. bravo!
am i brave enough to give it a go?
Great representation of the city's aspect of "nature."
Sorry I haven't been around much. I'll try to stop by more.
Read ya' later!
Oh, I am so bad at getting my stride back. Horrible!
Good poem! They are like the trees of the city.
:)
I know haiku was originally about nature, but the modern definition says something like "a poem written in this form", so I figure any subject matter is fair game!
I like your take on it!
I am getting a kick out of reading every ones. I love how you chose the natural city and then captured it perfectly in just 3 simple lines. Perfect!
a.
I love haiku - and that was an excellent one. I know they aren't always easy, but you did a great job.
To me, your world of writing just sounds like heaven - or at least that's how I picture it in my mind's eye.
I like the haiku. Strangely serene in an environment which is any but serene.
A nature-walk in Manhattan: what a perfect theme. Your haiku is great. It has set me trying to think in that rhythm. I love the challenges I find in blogs like yours, having allowed myself to go unchallenged for far too long. (And I recognize the first part of this entry all too much.)
Cate this is perfection! (And I just wrote one about coffee - I mean life) I completely love it. So glad you shared and thanks for the nice comments about the blog :)
Your words capture Manhattan
"Concrete mountains," eh? What a good analogy, and it does make them seem like a natural part of a city's landscape.
I enjoyed your take on the haiku!
"Elegant and refreshing"--describes your haiku as well.
Hi Cate! Usually haikus suck so much that I can't call them poetry... I am sorry serious haiku writers! But this one here is very intelligent and subtle. "Scaled by a push of a button" and "concrete" make it much more urban than naturalistic, but then again there resides the cleverness of this haiku. It is minimalistic all right, and contains a lot of thought. Expresso concentrate, great!
Ann Marie
I like it better each time I read it.
love the haiku. i am reading it again and again. love it.
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